Reflection 5

This week was cluttered with projects, assignments, and unexpected issues at home; as such, I had little time to focus on writing. However, I did manage to write a short passage as a rough draft of an introduction. One might say that it could be considered the first "final" work I've done, as it is the first bit that is not included in the seven pages of brainstorming I have. What follows is a short excerpt:

"The ancient stone of the crumbled ruin seemed to have been assimilated by  the forest itself: cyclopean and overgrown with twisting vines and jade lichen, their grey color a stark contrast to the surrounding leaves of a green deeper than any ocean and darker than the blackest midnight. The structure itself had long since disintegrated into rubble, leaving only those stones that once formed the floor and the bases of what had once been seven identical walls. Tree roots and small bushes had long since burst through the carved marble floor, bone-white tiles as dented, cracked, and misshapen as the world in which it had long sat unused. The body and roots of an oak had grown through a fault in the floor beneath our feet; at least thirty feet tall at its highest and a good man and a half across, its unintended presence and obvious age juxtaposed how incomprehensibly old the strange structure was.  Yet the odd pedestal in the center of the ruin, carved of the same veined and impure marble as the floor, seemed completely untouched by the eons that have passed since its creation; the others and I immediately knew that its remarkable preservation went beyond its density and construction. The man… no, not a man, for it was no human that stood before the other travelers and I... the thing that stood in the center of the pedestal seemed to silently confirm our suspicions, looking down upon us and watching our slow and shaking approach."

I am greatly anticipating the four-day weekend ahead, as it will give me time to properly focus on the story and truly begin weaving the world that I have envisioned but have merely begun to put to paper.

If anyone has some comments or criticism of the passage above, please do comment; this is a learning experience, and I would much appreciate any quick feedback.